Here are some properties of a haiku
- a 3 line form consisting of 5, 7 and 5 syllables
- contains a word called (the kigo) which directly makes reference to the season, e.g. snow indicating winter
- incorporates a distinct grammatical break (the kireji) at the end of either the first or second line
- captures a moment or a setting
- haiku usually are reflections upon the natural world, senryu follow the same form but are reflections on human nature and may be humorous
- haiku and senryu usually manifest the Japanese aesthetic referred to as wabi-sabi, a beauty hallmarked by imperfection, impermanence, and incompleteness with a gentle slightly mournful appeal.
Here are some haiku and senryu.
The first soft snow!
Enough to bend the leaves
Of the jonquil low.
- Basho
the morning paper
harbinger of good and ill
- - I step over it
- McCroskey
grab and go coffee ...
breathe to let stories unfold
tea leaves brew slowly
- alan mee
My Online Girlfriend
Might be a supermodel
Or a big fat man.
- mr. big
summer is coming
break out the barbecue set
enjoy undercooked meat
- five spice
The challenge, compose a haiku or senryu and post here. The people who reply can decide the winner. The prize, a smug inner glow.
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6 comments:
Five syllable here
and seven syllable there
make a haiku clear
Is the format correct?
The format is correct in terms of the syllables.
There is no kigo and no kireji so it is not traditional in those respects.
A haiku also is not so linear, it does not follow a logical pattern such as A therefore B therfore C. It is more of a puzzle. I think there is a need to have two contrasting images.
Nevertheless, I like this and what a great way to express what a haiku is, by writing a haiku itself.
How very fractal of you!
Love like summer sun...
I crave its shining warmth.
My how good it feels.
Angels sprinkle dusk
January night comes in
I walk in dreamland
Dark angels chase light
Summertime hazy blackness
I dive into dream
Light chases dark away
Kookaburras greet dawn light
I turn and lie in
Some great haiku here, particularly like the sequence from jmnsw.
I will have to work on some more. Here is one, this is still a work in progress. This senryu tries to capture the farewells we are now saying.
Beginnings, endings
A different man says farewell -
thankful for the change
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